Hey Evan,
This is a really good stat, its clear you have a strong vision of where your going with your paper. But I have some suggestions to make it a little more organized and easier to write.
First, and I'm saying this because I overheard Andy suggest it, You may want to consider editing down your thesis to make it a bit shorter and less scattered. Your point is societies obsession and addiction to digital (not technology) representation devices has drastically changed out way of life, in more ways then one.
(obviously this isn't strong enough, but more short and to the point like this)
You should probably map out a series of paragraphs that specifically explain which argument it is providing evidence for.
Use the examples you listed in your original thesis.
- Alicia
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